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Serit: The Journey to Wydra

Atul Saini

Story about:rebellion, elves, dwarfs

Rating:
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Ranking:
#556 in Supernaturals
#147 in Action thriller


On Hold: 15 Nov 11 pages

Publication: 21.06.2019 — ...


Description of book "Serit: The Journey to Wydra"

As the war on the world of Jasprin reaches to sort of a stalemate the warriors of both sides look into the sky to look for signs of prophecy and when they finally get one, both sides are set into new missions; one who wants to make sure it never comes true and the other which is ready to go all in to turn this prophecy into a reality. Meanwhile a sixteen year old boy who had just shifted to America due to the transfer of his father is all set for his first day in his new high school, but instead of having fun in studies and sports like other boys of his age, he finds that he and his new friends are being targeted by a mysterious enemy who wants to make sure that the Wydra's prophesy dies before it could become a root cause of a rebellion.

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Roza Csergo
14.10.2019, 11:47:26

For some reason I can't post this on the Facebook discussion, so I'll leave it here.
This is high fantasy - with elves, dwarfs, other beings - mixed with hindu cultural elements, which gives the story a very nice perspective. How can I not like it?!
Congratulations Atul Saini for coming up with this idea and giving it life through words.
I see that you have made a lot of editing since I last read your story. Really well done with the paragraph separations. The verity of sentences make an enjoyable read. I also like the name choices, they are unique and easy to remember.
What could use some improvements are your descriptions. The actions are done well but you're often telling when it comes to emotions. I'm sure you could show the anger, the happiness, the worries of your characters.
I also think it's really interesting how you switch chapters between fantasy and modern day reality. And how you wave one into another gradually.
I, personally, find this story a good read, and recommend it to fantasy lovers. Great job Atul, keep on thriving.

Atul Saini
14.10.2019, 13:38:57

Thank Roza

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Roza Csergo
30.08.2019, 09:09:52

I like the changes you've made.
It become a much easier read.
And also the introduction of the story is nicely done. I enjoy its high fantasy elements.

Atul Saini
30.08.2019, 10:37:45

Thnx Roza

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Roza Csergo
03.08.2019, 21:24:16

Hi. Would you please consider follow for a follow? I'd love to connect with you. Thanks

Atul Saini
04.08.2019, 07:42:06

Roza Csergo, Cool

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Kat Moon
03.08.2019, 14:56:17

Unusual for me but I love it ❤️?

Atul Saini
03.08.2019, 16:49:26

But why question mark?

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Anamel Aleta
01.08.2019, 22:30:55

I find this story to be intriguing and you have a nice way of describing events so that the reader can picture them. However, I also noticed you drag on your sentences into long paragraphs which makes it hard to keep up and understand what's going on at some points. It's kinda like a bunch of different pieces and ideas all combined into one big sentence which I think would be clearer and easier to understand if separated more. I also noticed some sentences without periods. Besides that, this has a lottt of potential.

Atul Saini
02.08.2019, 13:14:02

Well it may be because I sometimes set a specific words target for myself, can u tell me which parts u felt were too long and where u think sentences need to be elaborated

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Atul Saini
10.07.2019, 20:59:52

Hey everyone, if you are enjoying my work do tell and if u find some flaws or feel that some segments need to worked on then do tell me down I'm the comments, it helps me in improving my work a lot

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Yoseph Sidena
04.07.2019, 23:35:35

This sounds actualy intresting

Atul Saini
05.07.2019, 17:11:30

Yoseph Sidena, Trying my best

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Douglass Millsap
01.07.2019, 20:25:12

Did you invent all these names?

Atul Saini
01.07.2019, 22:38:06

Douglass Millsap, Yup

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Joe Marh
26.06.2019, 20:10:05

will you continue soon?

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Joe Marh
30.06.2019, 16:09:07

Atul Saini, sounds good

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Roza Csergo
26.06.2019, 11:25:35

Thumbs up for this story.

Atul Saini
26.06.2019, 19:29:58

Roza Csergo, Thnx

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Clayton Terrel
21.06.2019, 16:04:07

in my library

Clayton Terrel
25.06.2019, 18:41:24

Atul Saini, well, that´s ok

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Mark Pearson
22.06.2019, 13:37:23

good story

Atul Saini
22.06.2019, 21:12:24

Mark Pearson, Thanks

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