Book. "Tears" read online
Rating:
30
300 21 3342

Ranking:
#222 in Short stories
#240 in School


Complete 11 pages

Publication: 16.05.2020 — 09.06.2020


Description of book "Tears"

Hannah a 13year old girl is stuck with a Dad who uses her as a punching bag, she is not only faced with depression at home but also in school.

This is a mind blowing short story with a lot of lessons to learn.

Comments on book:

Total number of threads: 11

Beata Gos 05.11.2020, 11:41:59

Very, very tragic story

The last comment in the thread:

Elizabeth Moses 06.01.2021, 09:17:58

Beata Gos, Thanks for the comment:)

Simple Pruny Spire 06.01.2021, 01:08:35

This was a very nice read, however very sad. The description of events were very precise, I could imagine Hannah's body as her dad threw her across the room, I could imagine Susan throwing Hannah's lunch in the box.

The only thing that confused me was Hannah's death.

For a nice written book, the end is very sad. Too much death.

Over all I loved it.

The last comment in the thread:

Elizabeth Moses 06.01.2021, 09:17:33

Simple Pruny Spire, Thank you.

A lot of kids are going through this and can't speak out. it is sad because I am trying to pass a message... I really appreciate your comment.

Beata Gos 05.11.2020, 11:26:31

Why are there silly people, hurting others, they are devil's advocate

morganthewriter 08.06.2020, 19:11:52

omg it's such a good book I wish I could stop crying so I can see the words lol

The last comment in the thread:

Elizabeth Moses 09.06.2020, 02:02:54

lol thanks for the comment dear

Ryo Francis 05.06.2020, 06:11:08

(1). Your narrative is written well — easy to read. I love short chapters
(2). Such a tragedy but many lessons to be learn from your MC, her stupid mom & doctor, her best friend :(
(3). Minor complaint — some spelling errors, Susan/Sofia as the bully? I assume MsJupiter was the house guest and why was she visiting? And SPOILER (offscreen/off the narrative death of her only friend)
I will check your other works soon. Thanks for the good read :)

The last comment in the thread:

Elizabeth Moses 09.06.2020, 02:02:24

Thank you for the review.. I really appreciate. I will work on this

Odun Ayo Godon 29.05.2020, 22:16:36

it was nice

The last comment in the thread:

Elizabeth Moses 29.05.2020, 22:22:50

thanks you:)

Odun Ayo Godon 29.05.2020, 22:16:23

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setare bp 20.05.2020, 09:57:24

its cool

The last comment in the thread:

Elizabeth Moses 20.05.2020, 13:55:13

thank you:)

Luna 19.05.2020, 22:11:29

Hannah didn't deserve to die, but that makes the story all the more real.

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The last comment in the thread:

Elizabeth Moses 20.05.2020, 02:35:38

thanks for reading:)

that's actually the point

Eloho Ajagba 19.05.2020, 00:51:45

Interesting, but Hannah don't suppose to die

The last comment in the thread:

Elizabeth Moses 19.05.2020, 02:50:22

thanks for commenting.. I believe her death will pass a lot of lessons to parents out there...:)

Favour Chiamaka 16.05.2020, 14:57:50

Comment text: hmmm, all death but interesting too
thanks author

The last comment in the thread:

Elizabeth Moses 16.05.2020, 17:57:41

you are welcome... thanks for reading my short book.. you are the best

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