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Thunder Tournament

Roza Csergo

Story about:romance, medieval, forbidden love

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Ranking:
#9 in Action & Adventures
#129 in Fantasy


Ongoing: 29 Sep 45 pages

Publication: 24.06.2019 — ...


Description of book "Thunder Tournament"

The Thunder Tournament takes place every year. Why is it different this time? It's the Year of the Wish. The King grants the champion one, no matter how outrageous that is.
Nobles and peasants alike want riches and fame, but eighteen-year-old Igrin has only one thing in mind: vengeance.
Willingly thrust into the undergrounds of this competition, she finds something she wasn't looking for: love. Soon she realizes how dirty this tradition truly is and questions her capability of survival.
Will she rise and have her wish heard by the king, or will the others squash her with their deceit and vile

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Total number of threads: 37

millen gray 01.10.2020, 15:14:45

i think it's hard to exlain an action story but I love the way you exlain your's

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Roza Csergo 01.10.2020, 15:37:12

millen gray, Thank you so much for reading ♥

Marilyn Lucero 24.09.2020, 18:41:42

Thank you so much for updating! I missed Igrin already.

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Roza Csergo 25.09.2020, 02:26:50

Marilyn Lucero, She's back and more fierce than ever. Thank you so much for reading ♥

Xyla Flores 18.10.2019, 21:43:44

Wow, I'm already impatient to see how the tournament will look like!

Lukkar may sound cruel but I have high hopes on him!

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Roza Csergo 18.10.2019, 22:41:34

I hope to deliver an interesting stand off between Igrin and the other competitors.
And Lukar is definitely a complex character.

Steve Ringer 15.10.2019, 01:38:14

Awesome new chapters with interesting twists.

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Roza Csergo 15.10.2019, 01:50:24

I'm happy you like them.

AnnaRCase 06.10.2019, 04:27:56

Roza Roza Dont leave us hanging like this! Its cruel! :)

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AnnaRCase 06.10.2019, 15:56:02


Yes though it was a bit confusing to follow at first. it would not be crazy for someone to question their young chief and go to great lengths to try and sabotage him if they believed he was not a capable leader.

AnnaRCase 06.10.2019, 04:21:31

So I hate the King and Lord Windar. I'm guessing that is what you are going for though:)

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Roza Csergo 06.10.2019, 10:02:08

Yes, one is more despicable than the other. Hope I managed to show the Fairheart's true nature.

Marilyn Lucero 03.10.2019, 00:06:53

This is getting more exciting. So surprised at the turn of events. I feel the pain of the Baduni chief, the wisdom of Jozeb and the burning spirit of Igrin.

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Roza Csergo 03.10.2019, 00:14:03

I'm so happy you returned to read the new chapters. Your support is invaluable. I'm trying to surprise my readers so they won't get bored by too much swordfight.

Junior Batley 29.09.2019, 15:54:37

Cover and the first pargraph-
Awesome.
Added this to my library.

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Roza Csergo 30.09.2019, 00:48:21

Thank you so much for taking the time to read my story.

Jake A. Strife 20.09.2019, 18:33:48

Regarding the Prologue:
There's a lot of action going on here, which is great. The opening line is definitely catching and immediately makes us want to know what's going on. Opening a story with dialogue can be very powerful. Maybe the most powerful. But sometimes it's frowned upon (and I don't really know why).

That said, this could definitely do with some ironing, and polishing. Myself, I usually post first drafts (maybe with a minor spell check), until I get to the point where I plan to publish a book--Then I edit, rewrite, etc.
Of course, if the story isn't finished yet, then don't go back and edit anything until you're done with the whole book. :)

I will try to read more, as the story interests me!

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Roza Csergo 20.09.2019, 18:47:37

Thank you so much for reading.
You can't imagine how much it means to me. I edit to the best of my capabilities before posting, but I'll definitely come back to polish it once I'm done discovering the story.

Edina Pollac 17.09.2019, 21:01:54

It's a really good story!I can't wait for more updates!?Highly recommend!?

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Roza Csergo 17.09.2019, 21:05:13

Edina Pollac, I cannot believe you read it so fast.
Thank you from the bottom of my heart.

Babs 09.09.2019, 02:34:58

I am very impressed, I'm so pleased you taken on board my advice, the opening his now very gripping, perfect way to start an action adventure, my editor says, it really makes you want to continue reading. You have done a great job, it really is now showing how dedicated you are to your work to improve it and you certainly have. My editor and I hope you continue it ^_^

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Babs 09.09.2019, 11:21:17

Roza Csergo, You're welcome. Bless you, I am just so pleased you tuck on board my wisdom. I know that feeling all too well giggle, I am like that with regards to my novel Master Guardian, it is always a shock to see we do have what it takes to be a writer and I hope your creative juices keep flowing ^_^

Babs 25.08.2019, 17:47:45

This shines with great potential, however with it switching between third person and first person makes it a little hard to read, I can hear my editor screaming pick one.
I'm afraid to say in my view it is not action adventure, for it needs to be action straight away, what springs to mind is Forgotten Realms Black Staff, the story opens with the Wizard battling a creature in order to save an elf girl from being attacked by it, straight away you have got him casting spells and beating the thing to a bloody pulp. Once dead he gets his guardian to take the child to safety before more of the creatures attack,
Another thing dialogue needs to be indented, in books it is always done this way, to make it clear to the reader someone is speaking.
This would make a great third person Fantasy Adventure story. ^_^

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AnnaRCase 03.09.2019, 14:43:30

Finally an update! :)

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Roza Csergo 03.09.2019, 20:11:26

A small one.

Marilyn Lucero 03.09.2019, 13:33:53

So this horrible death is the reason why Jozeb trained Igrin with his fighting skill.

Steve Ringer 30.08.2019, 00:45:22

Please update....this is such a good story

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Roza Csergo 30.08.2019, 08:51:33

Not much longer. I promise.
Thank you for your patience.

Goodness Shadrach 14.08.2019, 22:36:01

this is the most amazing work piece of yours that I have read Roza, the way you portray the actions and their dialogue makes me feel as if I'm there, watching like you know, a movie in my head. I really can't wait to get down to the last part, please soothe my impatient heart by updating soon.

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Roza Csergo 14.08.2019, 23:18:30

Oh I'm so happy to hear your thoughts about my work. I hope you like the story. I'll start updating it regularly after the 20th of August.

A. Neeson 06.08.2019, 16:41:13

when will you update?

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Roza Csergo 14.08.2019, 23:16:21

Hi, sorry for the late reply. Thank you so much for your interest. These past few weeks have been really hectic, I apologise. I will come back to update everything regularly after the 20th of August.

Goodness Shadrach 14.08.2019, 20:25:04

I just started this, the comments make it sound interesting, I hope I'm not disappointed Roza

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Roza Csergo 14.08.2019, 23:13:34

Hello dear, thank you so much for your time. I'm so happy you are reading my story. I truly hope you won't be left disappointed.

Marilyn Lucero 04.08.2019, 04:54:57

Waiting for the next chapter.

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Marilyn Lucero 04.08.2019, 09:47:53

Roza Csergo, I understand:-)

David Rauenzahn 03.08.2019, 06:03:44

I really like what I have read so far. You have a plot that clips along nicely and characters that are developing nuance as the story progresses. A few things I could recommend revisiting would be 1) there are some times where I think the tension would build if you paused a little more in how the character experiences the moment. However, there are times where I REALLY like that the main character has delayed emotional reactions because that displays her stoicism and emotional discipline (not quite repressing them). 2) Sometimes, your characters feel like they are floating in a void. Particularly with the fight scene between the protagonist and the chief, the actions felt like they were happening in a vacuum. I could see what each action was, but not where the opponents were in relation to one another.
Overall, really enjoyed reading this. Keep it up!

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Roza Csergo 03.08.2019, 09:40:47

Thank you so much for reading my story. It means a lot that you took the time to read it and critique it. I'll have a read through and see where I can further develop that fight scene.

Steve Ringer 28.07.2019, 18:43:51

I hope you update this soon. Please. Cannot wait to read about the tournament.

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Roza Csergo 28.07.2019, 19:07:44

Steve Ringer, I'm working on it right now. I was focusing on updating my other story Her Blood.

Vijay Kerji 21.07.2019, 13:25:29

I can't wait seeing Igrin playing in the tournament

AnnaRCase 20.07.2019, 20:24:05

sure you don't care ;) But I'll bet he has better food. Could probably at least get a good meal...

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AnnaRCase 20.07.2019, 23:27:23

Lukar probably has nice soaps too Igrin :)

Vijay Kerji 20.07.2019, 17:04:46

I enjoyed reading the first four chapters and really liked the fight scene. You wrote it well and I continue to read your works. I started rooting for your main characters, Ingrin and Jozeb
Consider reading my ongoing novels and share your thoughts.

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Vijay Kerji 20.07.2019, 21:32:46

Roza Csergo, Okay! Happy reading. I'm sure you will enjoy it as I did reading yours!

Marilyn Lucero 13.07.2019, 16:52:13

I think its the hind rider.

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Marilyn Lucero 13.07.2019, 17:15:54

Roza Csergo, Yes! Hahahaha!

Marilyn Lucero 12.07.2019, 09:30:54

I hate this wrinkled old man!

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Roza Csergo 13.07.2019, 16:04:03

diamond46, Chapter 9 is up. Hope you like it.

Marilyn Lucero 12.07.2019, 06:01:45

I feel so sad for Nolly and am amazed again by the story of a dog's loyalty.

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Roza Csergo 12.07.2019, 08:53:10

diamond46, I was sad too as I wrote it.
I intended it to be impactful for the reader.

Emilia Foxe 12.07.2019, 03:05:14

Can't wait to read the next chapter!

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Roza Csergo 12.07.2019, 08:41:18

Emilia Foxe, Thank you so much for reading. Next update is tomorrow.

Marilyn Lucero 11.07.2019, 13:14:14

Wow! What an interesting story especially that the fighter is a woman! This is my first time reading and action story because I've always been a love story addict.

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Marilyn Lucero 11.07.2019, 20:00:32

Roza Csergo, That's interesting. I'll definitely finish this up very soon

Roza Csergo 04.07.2019, 19:09:56

It was pointed out that I changed narrators in chapter 7.
Indeed I did. Here's why: I introduced another point of view and I want the readers to instantly notice that the chapter isn't about Igrin.

Steve Ringer 29.06.2019, 13:54:32

I like it how this last chapter gives the characters a moment to breath and to converse with each other.

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Roza Csergo 29.06.2019, 14:12:07

Steve Ringer, Thank you for your comment.
I want my readers to get to know the characters.
I'll post another chapter soon. Enjoy

Ruby Rose 28.06.2019, 23:55:13

Let the fight begin!

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Roza Csergo 29.06.2019, 00:17:01

Then you'll like what's to come in the arena and behind it. Thank you so much for reading my story.

Steve Ringer 28.06.2019, 12:32:23

I wonder what's this tournament about

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Roza Csergo 28.06.2019, 12:53:51

Steve Ringer, You will find out soon. Thanks for reading

Joe Marh 27.06.2019, 15:15:46

they need horses, that´s it

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Roza Csergo 27.06.2019, 16:18:59

Joe Marh, She needs the horse not just for transport but for the tournament as well.
Thank you kindly for reading :-)

John Mitchell 26.06.2019, 20:12:11

red is a noble color

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Roza Csergo 26.06.2019, 20:29:59

John Mitchell, It is :-)
Thank you for reading my story.

Vera J Evan 25.06.2019, 23:26:45

Ooh, can't wait to read who is going to be worthy of Igrin's heart!

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Roza Csergo 26.06.2019, 00:00:04

Vera J Evan, Hope you enjoy the story :-)

Bertha Francis 25.06.2019, 18:42:58

nice 2 chapters, waiting for more

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Roza Csergo 25.06.2019, 18:57:38

Bertha Francis, Thank you so much. I'll upload chapter 3 tomorrow.

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