Age restriction 14+
Story about:this is a first person zombie apocalypse
#51 in Post-apocalyptic
22.07.2019 — ...
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I like the story:)
Thank you there is more to come
You wrote the dog chasing scene well
Thank you this has been my first writing attempt as an adult
I started reading this one too. Different than the others, but still gripping.
great work so far, keep it up.... can't wait to see what happens next
long paragraphs though
Thanks I'm still working on that
great concept, slow updates
Hi thanks for your feedback I only do short chapters so it might not always appear in your updated list I am trying to do two chapters a week due to work commitments I hope you can stick with me to the end and that you like what you read
Love the new cover, Simon.
simon 1982, It's awesome.
Your prose is getting better. I like the diversity of the paragraphs. May I give another unsolicited tip? Each dialogue line should start with a capital letter.
Thank you that is another tip I will use I hope you are enjoying it
Good storyline despite the poor grammar
simon 1982, I don't publish anything, only read
There's so much improvement in the second chapter. I think you're starting to get the hang of creating sentences. The only thing that I could suggest doing is putting each line of dialogue in quotation mark ("..."). For example
"See you tonight? "
"Sure. At what time?"
Roza Csergo, Thanks for the encouragement I will it will take time I know I was going to try and make this one book but the way the ideas keep coming I think it might end up a series I have not written since junior school when I entered a competition and won it was nothing big but it got published in a book for schools. That was before teachers had started to get annoyed with my bad work. But now I have so many stories I think it is about time I wrote them down to see if people like them im under no elution that I will ever make any money from them I just want to entertain people
Despite errors, it paces well. Reminds me a bit of John Dies at the End. But you have some work ahead of you. Keep writing. And don’t be too hasty to click the publish button. Go over it again. And again. And then once more to be sure. Putting it down once is only the start. Editing and rewriting are musts. But keep it up
I think I will have a watch of the film and a read thanks
You have imagination, which is great starting point, but you need style and to work on your grammar. Periods, quotations, etc. Maybe pick up a book on grammar or a take a course. You've got a ways to go, but the journey of a thousand miles starts with the first step. I wish you the best of luck and thank you for reading Omega Virus.
Work your butt off. That's the only way to succeed as a writer.
Thank you for reading it I will keep on with it and see how it goes maybe by the end it will get better
Try using merging multiple fragmented sentences into one. Avoid using THAT and LY words. Your idea has potential but needs writing style. I have nothing negative against your imagination. The idea is good.
PS: Don't forget to check my books as well. your suggestion will be appreciated.
Hi. I don't want to sound rude but may I suggest dividing this one huge paragraph into a smaller one?
Also, would you consider adding some punctuation marks, like commas and periods (full stop)?
Different length sentences would make it a lot easier to follow the storyline.
Happy writing :-)
Roza Csergo, Thank you I will try that it's all good advice
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