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#34 in Fantasy
#272 in Romance

Ongoing: 03 Mar 32 pages

Publication: 21.02.2021 — ...
Contests: Beauty and the Beast

Description of book "You and Me "

"Tell me the truth!"
"I can't! You'll hate me."
"I am this close to hating you for not telling me anything!"

May Dawson was a high school graduate who just moved into the small town Mazadora. A man by the name of Eros, appeared at her door one night, beaten up. She took care of him even as the connection they shared scared her with how fast it grew.

One day at work, May is attacked by people who call themselves supernatural bounty hunters. They want the heir to the Treryn throne, Prince of all dragons and supernaturals. She doesn't know what they are talking about until they mention his name.

It's Eros.

To keep her family safe, May goes on the run with Eros, learning about the supernatural world and the bond they share.

Comments on book:

Total number of threads: 1

Istoria Xander 02.03.2021, 23:46:13

I'm only on chapter 1 but - hey, that's a very good start, well done! I like your main character and you've done a good job throwing us straight into the action!
One little punctuation thing: when you have dialogue followed by a speech tag, there should be a comma before closing the quotation marks instead of a full stop. For example:
"I am going to school," Jane said.
This doesn't go for question marks and exclamation points.
Hope you don't take this as me being negative, just trying to be helpful. :)
I'll come back to read the rest when I have a chance. Happy writing!

The last comment in the thread:

Melissa N 03.03.2021, 15:34:32

Istoria Xander, thanks so much for the tip. i'll be sure to try to change. i just got so used to full stops and stuff but it also kinda depends on the english you use. i use british english and i heard now they put the quotations before the punctuation or something of the sort. i'm doing research on it. oh and thanks for reading.

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