Alice in Mapleland
26.12.2020 — ...
#814 in Young adult
#215 in Humor
Sample 55 pages
26.12.2020 — ...
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Good afternoon ))
Ohhh.... it was so dangerous for Den to meet Alice's father but it was good experience. The parents are always worried about kids, where are they, how are they?... Of cz teenagers must follow Dad's rules and stay in touch with cellphone on.
This is good idea to have a walk together to see Christmas light, to see how is snow falling down.
Thanks a lot.
Thank you very much, Svetlana!
I think meeting Alice's mom would be much easier for Den. Mothers are usually more open to accepting that a seventeen y.o. girl is an adult. For dads is a little more difficult to understand it, usually. In my opinion ))
Let's see, if the parents got all the information they needed to relax. ))
Thank you, Svetlana!
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Good evening)) I had read all of it well till ''The book is not finished yet"
Thanks a lot you press a bottom to move me back to X-mas time again. I can smell and feel my favorite holiday! I like how do you descrube Alice's emotions, the 1st meet with Den, ha... she was jealous. So little by little she is falling in love.
Waiting for more ))))
Thank you very much, Svetlana! ❤️(ˆ‿ˆԅ)
You've made me happy with your opinion on my story. I needed someone to read the full version and tell me how it looks from their point of view. :)
I'm already writing the next part with a new wave of inspiration you gave me.
Thank you for that! ❤️❤️❤️
Hullo! I recently added this book to my library because the synopsis and title sounded so cute. :D Alice in Mapleland~ Hehe, I don't often find stories set in my country so it is refreshing to see! I just finished reading Ch 1 and I'm loving Alice as the narrator so far as she describes her family during Christmas time and how she feels about moving to a new country and starting over. I also always loved 'Alice in Wonderland' kind of tales so I'm curious if you'll be pulling inspiration to include in your story too. I will definitely continue reading when I can and hopefully share more thoughts in-depth later on as I read further. ^_^
noveltealover, Thank you very much! :)
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I'm here ;))
Let's go to read!!!
Светлана Михалева, Thank you very much, Svetlana! ❤️
Very sweet. I like it.
Thank you for your comment! It's really important to me to know an opinion of a reader.
You've made me happy! :-) I hope you will like the story even more at the end. ❤️
Hey there! I love the care you've put into highlighting the little details. It is, what I believe, makes a book come to life and makes it truly special...
Given that English isn't your first language I don't believe that this should have been a particularly easy feat.
While the fact that you aren't a native speaker (or writer) does show a bit, with a few interruptions in flow (happens to the best of us, believe me :* ) and an odd word here and there , I think that is a skill quite simply that is acquired over time...So keep up the awesome work, the polishing will come over time. Can't wait to read more from you!!
Nyssa Quadros, Thank you very much, Nyssa! I changed the words, where is possible.
I left deer in one place because it is needed for a wordplay - dear/deer. :-)
Russian Father Frost rides in a sleigh pulled by three horses (aka Troika))
I didn't think you were too critical, I was asking for it. ))
So, thank you for your help! ❤️
hi there....thanks for the few constructive comments you'd given to my work.
i love how you pay attention to smaller details in your write up that could give the reader a kind of picture of what's going on...keep that up---a true skill that a writer needs.
Just like you, English is not my mother tongue so, I can relate much with your difficulty. However, things can be inproved and we can edit now and then our own works paying attention to verb tenses and the use of proper conjunctions for a smooth flow of the story. Break a leg!
Наталия Арчер, True...
I’d be happy to know what you think of the story.
Thank you! ❤️
My name is Natalia, I write in Russian as well, that's why my name is written in Cyrillic )) I hope you will like my young-adult romance full of love, humor, jealousy, and everything in between.)
Please, don't be shy to write everything you think about my work. I always want to make it better. The best after all. :-)
Thank you very much!
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